Talk:Trump's War: His Battle for America

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Snark, tighten writing, segues[edit]

This is a really good article. It just needs [1] tighter writing (less repetition), segues from one intra-chapter criticism to another ("In addition to the above,..."), and some snark (does he day anything stupid? cquote time!) FuzzyCatPotato of the Apathetic Lavas (talk/stalk) 15:32, 17 September 2017 (UTC)

A few good parts[edit]

This section is presumably supposed to highlight some of Savage's stopped clock moments, but it also includes the chapters beyond chapter 9, which are far from reasonable. Was thinking of separating those out and relocating the good parts section to the end of the article.--KingWill473 (talk) 15:47, 9 March 2018 (UTC)